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Suite des aventures canadiennes... pour améliorer votre expression écrite.

1/ Petit exercice rapide ...  Image4 1image4-1.jpg

2/ ... dont voici la correction : Image5 1image5-1.jpg

3/ Travail de rédaction d'un paragraphe court à partir des expériences canadiennes. Ce n'est pas aussi compliqué que cela peut en avoir l'air à distance, promis !

- Aide pour démarrer car il faut vous poser des questions sur vos goûts et vos peurs... : Image7image6.jpg

- En utilisant la fiche ci-dessus ainsi que la fiche du cours d'hier (la présentation des 4 tours), rédigez 2 courts paragraphes en suivant ces modèles : Image8image7.jpg Les paragraphes en vert sont des exemples.

- Il faut rédiger un premier paragraphe qui vous permet d'expliquer quel tour vous avez choisi et pour quelles raisons (au moins 3 raisons).

- Puis un second paragraphe qui vous permet d'expliquer pourquoi vous ne souhaiteriez pas faire l'un des 4 tours proposés.

4/ Vous me postez votre travail en bas de cette page de l'agenda, dans les commentaires, pour que je puisse vous corriger.

Commentaires (16)

Charlotte Péricaud
  • 1. Charlotte Péricaud | 11/06/2020
Hi,
I am ready to try rafting in the Canaian Rockies because I lovesensations strong, and I think it is extremely challenging and I have never been rafting before !

I wouldn't like to go dosledding in the Canadian Rockies because I am scared of dogs and I am afraid of being cold.
hey-teacher
  • hey-teacher | 11/06/2020
Hi Charlotte. Here is your text : I am ready to try rafting in the Canadian Rockies because I love being thrilled, and I think it is extremely challenging and I have never been rafting before ! I wouldn't like to go dogsledding in the Canadian Rockies because I am scared of dogs and I am afraid of being cold. Thank you for your work, bye !
Da Siva Pinheiro Chloé
  • 2. Da Siva Pinheiro Chloé | 11/06/2020
Hello teacher !
Désolé pour ma réponse tardive ..
Merci pour votre correction !!
See you soon !!
Chloé
hey-teacher
  • hey-teacher | 12/06/2020
Hello Chloé Pas tardive du tout, tout va bien. Merci pour ton travail. Have a nice week-end.
Sourzac Clément
  • 3. Sourzac Clément | 10/06/2020
Hey teacher!
Voici mes paragraphes:
I am ready to try parachute because I am crazy about beautiful lanscapes. It is extremely chalenging and I've never done parachute before!
But, I wouldn't like to go parachuting because I'm scared of void!
See you soon!
Bye!
Clément
hey-teacher
  • hey-teacher | 10/06/2020
Hi Clément ! The first boy from the class who is doing his work :-) I am ready to try parachute because I am crazy about beautiful lanscapes. It is extremely challenging and I've never done parachute before! But, I wouldn't like to go parachuting because I'm scared of heights ! Excellent. Keep it up Clément !
Eva
  • 4. Eva | 09/06/2020
Hello teacher !

I am ready to try dogsledding in Algonquin park Ontario because i like a dog and i like snowy scenery.
I think that released the mind.
It’s an experience to do.

I don’t enjoy to do rafting in the Canadian Rockies because i am not comfortable in boat and is dangerous if the boat overturns but the scenery must be beautiful.

Good bye!
Eva
hey-teacher
  • hey-teacher | 10/06/2020
Good morning Eva. Here is your text : I am ready to try dogsledding in Algonquin Park Ontario because I like dogs and I like snowy sceneries. I think that soothes the mind. It’s an experience to live. I don’t enjoy rafting in the Canadian Rockies because I am not comfortable in a boat and it is dangerous if the boat overturns but the scenery must be beautiful. Very good work. Take care.
Debord Manon
  • 5. Debord Manon | 09/06/2020
Hello teaser !

I'd love to go dogsledding in algonquin park Ontario because i'm comfortable around dogs,
i'm crasy about snow ,i love scenery Nordic,
i create beautiful memory and also because i'm fan of "The call of the wild" .

I wouldn't like while-watching of Vancouver because i'm afraid of water and i'm non comfortable in a boat.

Good bye!
hey-teacher
  • hey-teacher | 10/06/2020
Hi Manon. Alors moi je ne suis pas un 'teaser', ni une 'bande-annonce' mais un 'teacher' ;-) Repeat after me, 'teacher'. Voici ton texte corrigé : I'd love to go dogsledding in Algonquin Park Ontario because I'm comfortable around dogs, I'm crazy about snow , I love Nordic sceneries. I have beautiful memories of such sceneries and I am also a fan of "The call of the wild" . I wouldn't like to go whale-watching off Vancouver because I'm afraid of water and I 'm not comfortable in a boat. Good bye Manon, take care !
Romy
  • 6. Romy | 09/06/2020
Hello teacher !

I am ready to try ziplinining in Whistler Britsh Columbia because I'm crazy about beautiful sceneries of Latin America. I love doing ziplining same if I have already practic this activity but I'd be happy to go ear for take a new challenge. I think the life is greatest with danger !

I'm don't enjoy to do dogsledding in Ontario because I have sacared of big dogs and I wouldn't like to go in a cold country !
hey-teacher
  • hey-teacher | 09/06/2020
Good day to you Romy ! Here is your corrected text : I am ready to try ziplinining in Whistler Britsh Columbia because I'm crazy about beautiful sceneries of Latin America. I love doing ziplining even if I have already practiced this activity but I'd be happy to go to Canada to take a new challenge. I think life is greater with danger ! I wouldn't go dogsledding in Ontario because I am scared of big dogs and I wouldn't like to go in a cold country ! Thank you for your work. Take care.
Nina 4ème C
  • 7. Nina 4ème C | 09/06/2020
I'd be happy to go rafting and Canadian Rockies because I'am not afraid of speed, I am ready to go try because it is extremely challenging and I'm intersted in rafting. This is the first time I have rafted.

I wouldn't like to go whale-watching off Vancouver because I don't really like whales and I am not comfortable in a boat.
hey-teacher
  • hey-teacher | 09/06/2020
Hello Nina, I hope you're doing fine. Here is the correction : I would be happy to go rafting in the Canadian Rockies because I am not afraid of speed, I am ready to try it because it is extremely challenging and I'm interested in rafting. I have already been rafting. (J'ai déjà fait du raft). I wouldn't like to go whale-watching off Vancouver because I don't really like whales and I am not comfortable in a boat. Very good work. Take care.
Da Silva Pinheiro Chloé
  • 8. Da Silva Pinheiro Chloé | 09/06/2020
Hello teacher !
Voilà mais paragraphes

I'm really to try dogsledding in the Canadian Rockies because
I'm enjoy the spectacular snowy scenery and I would like to feel new sensations but too strong .
I think it's an experience to live .

I don't enjoy ziplining in the Canadian Rockies because
I'm afraid of being in a vacuum on a harness and is dangerous .
I am not comfortable in height .
See you soon !!
Goodbye !!
Chloé
hey-teacher
  • hey-teacher | 09/06/2020
Hi Chloé I'm glad to see that you are doing well. Here is your corrected text : I would really like to try dogsledding in the Canadian Rockies because I enjoy the spectacular snowy scenery and I would like to feel new sensations but not too strong. I think it's an experience to live . I wouldn't enjoy ziplining in the Canadian Rockies because I am afraid of heights on a harness and it is dangerous . See you soon.

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