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RECOPIEZ AU PROPRE DANS VOTRE CAHIER LA CORRECTION DE VOS TEXTES SUR VOTRE CHAMBRE IDEALE. Voici les corrections :

Mahawa :

It is a modern bedroom. There is a king-size bed near the window. There are two beside tables on both sides of the bed. There is a cupboard in front of my bed. My bedroom is tidy. There is a mirror above my bed . There is a big white sofa next to my bed. There are white walls because it is not a colour. There is a T.V in front of my bed.

Ambre :

My room would be a room with a double bed so that I can have a good view from it. There would be white and black walls and on these walls there would be posters of my favourite animes. I would also have a large window to be able to see the city. I would have to make a secret seal to hide food. This is my ideal room.

Loine :

My ideal bedroom is tidy . From my window I can see the city and I can hear cars . My bedroom is pink and white .I am musical .I play tennis . In my bedroom there is a TV ,a computer, with some games and a ps4.

Elona B. :

My ideal bedrooom is tidy and big. From my window I can see the contryside, the pool and the chickens. I can hear the hens. My bedroom is pink and grey because they are my favourite colours. I love animals because I have a lot of posters and stuffed animals. I love feathers and dream catchers. I love musicals because I have CDs on the bedside table, a guitar and the posters of my favourite singers. My double bed is under my window.
My big rug is near my double bed. My big desk is between the big rug and the big grey beanbag. My big grey beanbag is near the staircase which goes up to a mezzanine. Under the mezzanine, there is a bathroom and a dressing-room. And on the wall, near the staircase, there is a TV.

Jade :

My bedroom is tidy . My bedroom is purple and blue . There is a bedside table near the bed above books on animals. There are two cupboards and one shelf . There are shelves above a grandfather wig and shells . From my window , I can see a horse that runs. I love animals because there are posters of tigers and dogs . I have a teddy bear and an armchair with two dolls. Above a desk, there is a computer with photos of a horse . I have a dog and two yellow and blue parrots.

Esteban :

My ideal room is tidy. I can see the garden where there is a panda. My room is green and white. I only have mangas and books, so I'm the hero. There is a desk to do my homework. My bed would be double and carried by a panda. There is also a large poster of Naruto between my bed and the cupboard.

Anglais

Pierre B:

My ideal bedroom is quite tidy. I can see the garden and I can hear the birds. My bedroom is blue. I don't have books because I don't like reading. There is a desk to do my homework.

Léo :

My ideal bedroom : My ideal bedroom is tidy (not messy). From the window, I can see the American West and I can hear royal eagles. My ideal bedroom is blue and yellow . I have shelves full of DVD westerns and I have books of raptors because I love far-west, cowboys and birds of prey. I have a big desk, a computer and a horse-shaped bed .

Lina :

My bedroom is tidy. From my window I can see a beach and several trees. I can hear the seaside. My bedroom is light pink and white. I have a poster of the USA and the American flag. I have a lot of CDs. I play handball. My bedroom is very luminous. I have a TV, a computer and one console with some games.

Pierre H :

My bedroom is tidy. From the window I can see the tennis courts of Roland Garros. I can hear the players . My bedroom is blue because it is my favorite colour. I like  football because I have a lot of jerseys. I lovee animals because I have a red fish and two red cats. I also like Mario Bros because I have posters and puzzles everywhere in my bedroom. In my bedroom there is a big desk.

Gaspard :

My bedroom is tidy. I can see the small valley of st priest ligoure and my garden. I have a big bed. My bedroom is white and grey. I have lots of books and I like reading in my bed. In my bedroom I have a guitar holder because I play guitar. I am musical !

Victor :

My bedroom is tall. My walls are in stone with two windows. I have a large bed in front of one big television. In my bedroom, there are two desks, a confortable amrchair with a handball ball pattern. I like playing video games in my bedroom. I love animals because I have a cat and i would like to have a dog.

Léna :

My bedroom is a little tidy and very big. I share my bedroom with my sister Milla. From the window, I can see a beautiful landscape of mountains with sunset. I have a big stereo and lots of CDs to listen to music when I want. I can do circus in my bedroom.

Florian :

My bedroom is tidy. From a window, I can see the countryside. The walls are yellow because it is my favorite colour. I am a football player. I am musical because I have a stereo and CDs.

Soizig :

My bedroom is tidy. I can see my horses and I can hear their whinnyings . It is purple and white . I have lots of book because I love reading . I have a lot of food because I'm a big eater .

Noah :

My bedroom is tidy. From the window I can see the beach and I can hear thé sound of the waves. My bedroom is white. I like my bed. I practise judo. I like reading. I am lucky because my life is cool. I am musical because I play the guitar and I have a cd player.

Elisa :

My bedroom is tidy, blue and grey. From the window I can see my garden and à lot of flowers. I have a big bed. I am very lucky because in my bedroom I have a tv and games of wii. I have a lot of comic strips because I like reading them. I love my bedroom because it's mine and I am free to do what I want.

Charline :

My bedroom is tidy and grey. From my window I can see a big tree. I am very lucky because in my bedroom I have a tv and games of wii. I have a big bed. I have a lot of comic strips and books because I like reading them. I love my bedroom because it's mine and I am free to do what I want.

Naoh :

My bedroom is tidy. From my window I can see the beach and I can hear the the waves. It is white and blue. I have a lot of Legos and a lot of books too. I have two balls of football, I have a TV and two consoles and a DVD player. I have electronic drums in my bedroom because I am musical.

Flora :

My bedroom is very tidy. From the windows I can see the countryside and the garden, the flowers, the trees and the birds. From the windows I can hear the birds.
My bedroom is dark blue and white. I have plants in the bedroom. I have a lot of books because I like reading.

 

 

Commentaires (5)

BOISSOU Axelle
  • 1. BOISSOU Axelle | 27/05/2020
Je savais qu'il y avait quelque chose qui n'allait pas !
C’était pas with horse-shaped cabins mais and even horse-shaped cabins.
En fait je voulais dire :
J'ai plein de posters avec des chevaux et même un lit cabane en forme de cheval .
hey-teacher
  • hey-teacher | 27/05/2020
Effectivement ;-) Mais tu vas même dire : and even a horse-shaped cabin puisque tu as signalé avoir un seul lit... Take care
BOISSOU Axelle
  • 2. BOISSOU Axelle | 27/05/2020
Merci d'avoir corriger ma rédaction je suis très contente car il ne me restait que ça à faire !
BOISSOU Axelle
  • 3. BOISSOU Axelle | 27/05/2020
Si c’était ici la voila :
My bedroom is purple and with . From the window I can see horses on the beach .
I have lots of posters with horse-shaped cabin . My desk is very large . The floor of my room is glass and below there is a swimming pool.

Et voila ma chambre idéale.
Bonne correction.
hey-teacher
  • hey-teacher | 27/05/2020
Hello Axelle. Here is your text : My bedroom is purple and white . From the window I can see horses on the beach . I have lots of posters with horse-shaped cabins . My desk is very large . The floor of my room is made of glass panels and below there is a swimming pool. Take care, see you !

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