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6èmes : homework

Envoyer sa rédaction (celle du contrôle sur la routine de son/sa meilleur(e) ami(e) après le collège) corrigée sur le site (en commentaire ci-dessous) pour 2 points verts.

Puis la recopier au propre dans son cahier pour mercredi matin pour deux autres points verts.

Ma correction sera disponible mardi.

 

Clément L : (rajout des adverbes de fréquence + because dans ma correction).

First he always works at 7:40. Next he never reads at 7:55. Then he often plays video game 8:30. After he has dinner at 9:00. Finally he always goes to bed at 9:15 because he is tired.

 

Cameron : (attention au sujet HE et au '-s' de la 3ème pers. du sing.)

My friend comes back to his house at half past five. At quarter to six he works then at half past six he has a shower. At quarter to seven he prepares dinner with his mother but he doesn't watch T.V.  Next he has dinner at seven o'clock and at eight o'clock he plays video games because he is very good at helping his mother.  Finally he goes to bed at quarter past nine because he is tired.

 

Lucie : (attention à l'absence du sujet SHE et au '-s' de la 3ème pers. du sing. + la dernière phrase n'a aucun sens... Elle est à revoir.)

First, she always has a snack at 5:55. Then she has a shower at 6:15. Next she prepares dinner at 7:30. After she always has dinner.  Finally because cet up

 

Mattéo : (attention au sujet HE et au '-s' de la 3ème pers. du sing. + aux heures anglaises)

First, he works at five forty. Then, he plays video games or watches T.V at half past six. Next, he always has dinner because he loves dinners. After, he watches tv and prepares his backpack at 9p.m. Finally he goes to bed.

 

Tom D. : (très bien mais il manque juste quelques heures...)

First my friend Clement often eats a snack. Then he usually does his homework because he is a good pupil. After he prepares his schoolbag . Next he always eats dinner and watches TV . Finally he goes to bed.

 

Clément B. (très bien mais attention au -s  à la 3ème pers. du sing.)

First, he eats biscuits at 4:00 pm. Next he always plays video games at 04:30 pm. Then he prepares dinner at 6:30 pm. After he has dinner with his family at 7:30 pm. Finally he always goes to bed because he never watches tv.

 

Clélia (très bien mais attention au -s  à la 3ème pers. du sing.)

The routine after school of my friend ... First , she has a snack and she always does her homework at 5:00. After homeworks she plays with her cat at 5:15. Next she helps her parents, usually at 6:30. Then she has a shower at 6:50 and she dines with her parents at 7:10. Finally she goes to bed at 9:10 because she is tired.

 

Amélis (très bien)

Every Monday Erine walks to the circus at 5:00 pm because it is next to the school. And at home Erine does her work, eats with her family and after she goes to shower and finally she goes to bed at 8:30 pm.

 

Alexane (attention aux heures)

When she comes home from school, she does her homework at five twenty. After she takes a shower and next she outs on her pyjamas at six thirty. Then she sets the table because her parents asks her to at six ten. Finally she goes to bed and sleeps at nine o'clock.
 

Joshua (hors sujet : la routine d'après le collège, pas celle du matin!)

First he brushes his teeth at 7:00. Then he has breakfast at 7:10. After he plays video games and he drinks juice at 7:20. After he eats cereals at 7:28. Finally he goes to school at 7:30.

 

Roxane (très bien)

First she comes back for school at 5:30. After she works and prepares her backpack. She does not help in the kitchen because she does not have the time. Next, she has dinner at 7:00. Then she reads or surfs the net... Finally, she goes to bed at 8:40.

 

Romane : (très bien mais n'oublie pas les mots de liaison)

First she has a snack at 5:20 and then works because she likes it. After she surfs the net at 5:30. Then she prepares her schoolbag at 5:35. She always has a shower at 5:45 . Finally she eats and goes to bed at 9:00

 

Blanche : (Attention aux -s à la 3ème personne du singulier, aux heures et aux nombres!)

First, she eats toast at 5h30 (five thirty). After, she feeds her cat at 5h40 (five forty). Then, she plays outside at 6h00 (six o'clock). Next, she watches TV at 6h25 (six twenty-five). Finally, she has dinner at 7h15 (seven fifteen).
 

Alisa : (la majorité des fautes seraient évitées avec le cahier sous les yeux...)

First she comes back from school at 5:15 Then she surfs the net because she likes it at 5:20. Next she eats at 05:30. After sens gonna do it at 17:40. Que veux-tu dire ? Finally she has a shower .
 

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